rewrite #14

All I do not Know

Could the unknown be a solid, singular thing?
A giant onion or cake resting in my back yard?
I nibble away at the edges most days, timidly
Lick around the corners with a cautious tongue

Sometimes, ravenous, I throw my whole body
At it, and find that all the things I do not know
Are sturdy enough to hold me up, strong enough
To throw me up toward the sky, and with this

Change in perspective, I see that all the things
I do not know are much too large and much too
Dim to be a pearly overgrown onion, or a waxy
Wedding cake on steroids, and floating higher

And higher above all I do not know, cradled in
The safe enclosure of the small tract behind my
Childhood home, I can look down onto me, into
The depths of my groaning, undiscovered self


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[The Original:]

All I do not Know

Could the unknown be a singular, solid thing?
A giant onion or cake sitting in my back yard?
I nibble away at the edges most days, timidly
Lick around the corners with a cautious tongue

Sometimes, ravenous, I throw my whole body
At it, and find that all the things I do not know
Are solid enough to hold me up, strong enough
To throw me up toward the sky, and with that

Change in perspective, I see that all the things
I don’t know are much too large and much too
Dim to be a pearly overgrown onion, or a waxy
Wedding cake on steroids, and floating higher

And higher above all I do not know, cradled in
The safe enclosure of the small tract behind my
Childhood home, I can look down onto me, into
The depths of my groaning, undiscovered self

2 Responses to “rewrite #14”


  1. 1 Donald Harbour April 18, 2008 at 2:04 pm

    I happened on your poetry and read your rewrite #14. Each of us interprets poetry to their own frame of reference in life, I find that you have painted a poetic picture I can see. I appreciate your efforts for that. Thank you for sharing.

  2. 2 blythe April 18, 2008 at 8:34 pm

    Donald: Thanks so much for your visit and your kind words!

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